Based off my first pitch, everyone seemed to like my concept and idea. I was told to show a little more passion, but I'm not sure if I hit that mark on this go around or not. So for my second go at my pitch I added a little more to it and changed the structure around completely to hopefully sell the idea a little bit better.
I think your idea is great and it looks like you put in effort finding out the information for your pitch (which cars are the most stolen in the U.S, etc.) I also enjoy how you ask rhetorical questions to draw in the audience. A couple things that I would work on when presenting your speech is to not constrict your body by folding your hands in front of you and instead opt for more open and fluid hand movements. I also suggest working on strategic pauses in your presentation, especially when asking the rhetorical questions. I believe this will make your elevator pitch even stronger! TA Mentor, Anna
William, Your technique and execution on this elevator pitch was great. I felt very informed afterwards, and could gain a real perspective on your vision and the purpose of your elevator pitch. I believe there are some aspects of your elevator pitch like your posture could help you evolve and grow stronger in elevator pitches. Keep up the good work and check out mine: http://stefankostas.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
Hi there William, Well first off let me say your delivery was a little bit uptight. It was kind of difficult to work with that posture or get motivated to interact. I think it's important for you to open up and loosen up. I see the people who commented before my comment had some similar things to say. I like how you did make a pretty concrete presentation that was rehearsed and easy to follow. You seemed pretty confident, but that is not reflected in your stance. I think that you are aware of this problem and will be able to fix it. In my video my posture was also difficult. View it here http://williamwright94.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2_16.html
Your pitch on your idea was amazing! You seemed very confident on what you were proposing! It was very informative and you could tell that with all the feedback you must have received from your last pitch, you now know what you need to do to better your company. If you want to check outlay blog just click the link below http://jalekatircioglu.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
I think you have an interesting concept, and one that many would want to see in real life. I like that you know the technical side of cars and the auto industry as well! One thing you could do would be to work on the fluidity of your presentation. It was somewhat robotic, but it's an easy fix! keep on grinding and be sure to check me out at
I think your idea is great and it looks like you put in effort finding out the information for your pitch (which cars are the most stolen in the U.S, etc.) I also enjoy how you ask rhetorical questions to draw in the audience. A couple things that I would work on when presenting your speech is to not constrict your body by folding your hands in front of you and instead opt for more open and fluid hand movements. I also suggest working on strategic pauses in your presentation, especially when asking the rhetorical questions. I believe this will make your elevator pitch even stronger!
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William,
ReplyDeleteYour technique and execution on this elevator pitch was great. I felt very informed afterwards, and could gain a real perspective on your vision and the purpose of your elevator pitch. I believe there are some aspects of your elevator pitch like your posture could help you evolve and grow stronger in elevator pitches.
Keep up the good work and check out mine: http://stefankostas.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
Hi there William,
ReplyDeleteWell first off let me say your delivery was a little bit uptight. It was kind of difficult to work with that posture or get motivated to interact. I think it's important for you to open up and loosen up. I see the people who commented before my comment had some similar things to say. I like how you did make a pretty concrete presentation that was rehearsed and easy to follow. You seemed pretty confident, but that is not reflected in your stance. I think that you are aware of this problem and will be able to fix it. In my video my posture was also difficult. View it here http://williamwright94.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2_16.html
Hey William,
ReplyDeleteYour pitch on your idea was amazing! You seemed very confident on what you were proposing! It was very informative and you could tell that with all the feedback you must have received from your last pitch, you now know what you need to do to better your company. If you want to check outlay blog just click the link below http://jalekatircioglu.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
What's good William.
ReplyDeleteI think you have an interesting concept, and one that many would want to see in real life. I like that you know the technical side of cars and the auto industry as well! One thing you could do would be to work on the fluidity of your presentation. It was somewhat robotic, but it's an easy fix! keep on grinding and be sure to check me out at
http://antdavblogs.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html